I will yell more of my own thoughts when it is not nearly 2am, but, on the writing itself, like Jackie I did mourn the lack of powerful description and quotable lines. TSOA was full of them and had a very simple lyricism that I thought worked really well, and I felt like she was trying to recreate that here but almost took it too far - to the point at which I found the imagery/wording/unnecessary similes & metaphors in every sentence more distracting than anything, in a way that detracted from the reading experience.

...I don't get this feeling a lot. Y'all have read my posts, you probably already know I'm usually a complete sucker for unnecessary metaphors xD